Welcome to the 2nd sample of my upcoming novel, "War Angel." In the previous excerpt I introduced you to Lenox. It's only right that I follow up by giving you a glimpse of Jahaira. Enjoy and as always, feel free to leave comments.
War Angel (Preview)
by Keith Kareem Williams
Chapter 1 - What Eyes Don't See...
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one more guy calls me Mami today I swear I’ll scream, Jahaira
thought while embarking on her daily trek to her father’s bodega with the food
her mother had sent for him in a brown paper bag. She was annoyed, almost to
the point of rage by the men who had tried to flirt with her. She could feel
their filthy thoughts crawl all over her skin as they undressed her with their
eyes. She hated it. The only person she wanted looking at her like that was her
man. She never desired or sought those types of stares from strangers. She couldn’t
help how curvy her hips were any more than she could do anything about how big
her butt was. Dark jeans were supposed to be slimming according to the
fashionistas but in truth, they didn’t do much to hide her shape. Her short,
black leather jacket stopped just above her waist and felt like a corset the
way it hugged her and compressed her large breasts. It made her look at least a
cup smaller but her thighs were still enough to catch most men’s eyes. It also
didn’t help that she had a naturally sexy walk that had been turning heads
since ever since she hit puberty. Over the course of the ten years since her
fourteenth birthday, she’d heard every crude remark as well as every polite,
pick-up line imaginable.
With a well-practiced
scowl, she cautiously continued on her way with confidence but avoided all of
their eyes because she knew too well the nature of men. If she looked directly
in their faces or even worse, dared to smile politely, they would assume that
it was an invitation to become more aggressive. To avoid the problems she
turned her eyes to the ground.
The city was
much cleaner than it had been when she was growing up but it was still filthy
enough. Its discarded things and garbage told its ugly truth. The glitzy,
glamorous images that seduced droves of tourists annually was actually the
beautiful lie. Every person that had lived long enough within the confines of
the decadent metropolis could see through all of the illusions. When she was
little, her father walked her back and forth to school every day to make sure
that his baby, his only child, got there safely. However, he couldn’t protect
her from everything. There had always been an air of unwholesome corruption
that crept through the streets like a living thing. Jahaira remembered stepping
over dirty, discarded needles that had been used to pump heroin into the veins
of people enslaved by the liquid demon’s embrace. In her teens, when her daddy
had grudgingly allowed her to walk home alone daily, the needles had become
scarce, replaced by tiny, empty vials that once contained crack-cocaine. During
that era, there seemed to be even more drug addicts than before but these
preferred to smoothly suck their heaven into their lungs through glass pipes.
Now that she was all grown up, she often walked over the crushed, brown trash
of gutted cigars that had been used to roll weed, the gateway drug, as they called it on the news. Apparently, it
opened the doors for more dangerous vices for individuals already inclined to
addiction. Most recently, those doors had opened up a Pandora’s Box that
unleashed a plethora of pills, all seductively named, that granted many
different kinds of highs. There were no traces of those to be found in the
gutters or streets.
It suddenly
started to drizzle which killed any chance of her mood improving. She hadn’t
brought an umbrella with her when she left the house, even though the dark grey
faces on the clouds had all suggested that they would weep heavily. She had already
traveled too far to turn back so all she could do was pick up her pace and try
to walk in-between the droplets. Fortunately for her, she reached her father’s
store right as the light rain became a heavy downpour.
“Hey sexy,”
Hector called out in Spanish from behind the front counter as Jahaira stepped
inside, wet and grouchy.
“How many times
I have to tell you not to talk to me like that? I don’t like it,” she told him
through gritted teeth.
“You should let
me take you out sometime,” he suggested as he tried to reach across the counter
and touch her chin before she slapped his hand away. “Ouch,” he shouted before
he pulled it back. He shook it as if it was hot and then ran it across his
thick, slick, black hair tied up in a bun that almost made him look feminine. Jahaira
thought that he could have passed for a girl if it wasn’t for his dark beard.
He calmly subdued whatever anger he felt but she thought she saw a hint of it
flash momentarily in the green of his eyes.
“No, and my
answer ain’t changing so stop asking! For one, you work for my father.
Secondly, I have a man already and I’m really tired of reminding you. Are you
slow?”
“Yeah, whatever.
You have a boyfriend that nobody has
ever seen. You sure you ain’t a lesbiana?”
“You know what Hector?
A woman has a better chance with me than you. Where’s my father?” she asked
impatiently.
“He’s in the
back with a client.”
“Client huh?”
she repeated sarcastically. “Well, my mother sent his lunch. Since he’s busy, I’ll
just leave it here with you then.”
Just as Jahaira
put the damp, brown paper bag on the counter, her father’s client walked out from the back room of the bodega but she didn’t
look like one of his regular customers. She was way too young and way too
pretty; a sharp contrast to the old harpies that usually sought out his unique services. The girl tried to
smooth her sandy-blonde hair back into place and straightened her blouse as she
scurried past Jahaira who looked on in disgust. The girl’s brilliantly blue
eyes never connected with Jahaira’s dark-brown eyes but she felt the venomous look
of disdain which made her pale-as-snow skin flush pink. (Jahaira might have
been cute but she was terribly intimidating when she wanted to be.) She was so
used to her father’s infidelities and indiscretions that it hardly bothered her
any more, or at least that’s what she told herself. She was more disappointed
in her mother who was also aware of them and passively pretended that she didn’t.
In her opinion, her father only did what her mother allowed him to. Before she
left, the young girl stopped at the counter and collected a stack of singles
wrapped in a rubber band from Hector. He grinned and held onto her hand until
she pulled her fingers from his clammy grip. He blew her a kiss before she
switched her hips as she sauntered away and left.
“Blankitas now
too?” Jahaira asked, surprised to find out that her father’s taste now seemed
to include young white girls.
“Every flavor
sexy,” Hector answered.
“Disgusting,”
Jahaira mumbled.
Hey Pumpkin!”
Mr. Caesar Ruiz called out to his daughter as he appeared from the back room of
the store with his belt unbuckled. His roundish belly, the result of too much
beer-drinking, hung slightly over the front of his pants.
“Fix your pants,”
she told him, handing him his soggy lunch. He took the food and opened his arms
wide to hug her but she backed away. Her father was a handsome, incredibly
charismatic man. They grey that was mixed in with his black, low-cropped hair
and sprinkled in his perfect goatee didn’t diminish his looks in any way. She imagined
how the women must have lusted for him in his prime. Even now, they seemed to
have a hard time resisting him.
“What? No kiss
for papi?” he asked.
“Hell no! God
only knows where your mouth has been
today,” she told him and moved the side of her face away from his lips. Without
another word she turned to leave.
“You’re not
gonna say anything, right Pumpkin? I mean, you don’t have to tell your mother,”
he started to say.
“Of course not.
I never do,” she answered. “Besides, I’m sure there’s nothing I could tell her
that she doesn’t already know.” The bells above the door jingled as she pulled
the handle and left.
Thanks for reading. In the meantime, while I finish up and prepare to release "War Angel" very soon, take a moment to read my previous release, "GLASS GODDESSES, CONCRETE WALLS," now available on Amazon for your Kindle or paperback.
Excellent! I see your character development growing and strengthening tremendously! In this short passage, I already have clear feelings about each of the characters...masterful. Brilliant use of metaphor, as well. "...dark grey faces on the clouds had all suggested that they would weep heavily." Beautifully foreboding.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for the feedback Susie Q. I'm trying to knock readers out of their seats every time. I've had this story on the back burner for a while and I have a new energy as i approach it with "fresh eyes." The story is somewhat complicated so i'm glad I waited to finish it up. It wouldn't be the same book if I had put it out two years ago when I originally wanted to.
DeleteIt's such a thrill and honor to be able to watch you on your journey. It's rare that we get to glimpse the works of our favorite authors before they are unveiled before the world at large. Thank you for allowing it.
DeleteI'm anxious to see where this one is going. You've hinted at it (excellent marketing - lol), and I've taken the bait...really looking forward to being able to dive in.
Proud of you for doing right by your craft and your talent. It does take time, and letting a story breathe for a while helps tremendously, I think. :)
Thanks Susie Q. Hopefully, I'll surprise you here and there. All I'll say is, expect some really nasty twists and turns.
DeleteI agree with Susie! I'm not even sure what to post. Thank you for sharing your talent with the world Mr Awesome Author. I SOOOOO CAN'T WAIT FOR THIS ONE!!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Amdub. This one is definitely my favorite. (I say that with every new book I work on but there really is something different about "War Angel")You ready to do another amazing cover for me AWESOME ARTIST LADY?
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